Mayfyre

I liked this (maybe because I've got a thing for pirates and ships :wink: ) and it was fun to read. I especially liked: "The water-worn wood. Rough and splintered, ...

I liked this a lot, the idea is beautiful and some of the imagery is very powerful. What I liked best was the last two lines: "Eyes and shadows stuck ...

In a way I quite liked the poem... in another way I didn't. Romeo and Juliette is definitely good material and you had some good ideas, but I think (as ...

Hey there :) I liked the idea of the poem. "Sitting in a sea full of people" is a good metaphor and a strong image (Though you could leave away ...

Thanks for pointing out the type-O :oops: I see what you mean with the rhyme in the second last stanza. The bit you pointed out was just another fun change ...

Hey there, thanks for the comment :) I think you are right that the shot could have been much stronger. The thing that caught my eye when I walked around ...

Thanks a lot for the comments :D I'm really happy you like it, though criticism is definitely welcome :) xx

Black and White trees

I absolutely loved the idea and it was pulled off well. Some bits were not really flowing quite right, but you getting there. "...for you see, such a great person ...

I liked this a lot and for some reason it reminds me of Carol Ann Duffy, she has the some sort of ironic style. Irony in poetry is sometimes quite ...

I really enjoyed this, a very strong topic originally handled. My favourite bits are the whole of the first stanza (which is just generally great regarding choice of wording and ...

Hehe, well, I kept the rejection letter so I can send it back to them if I ever win the Nobel price :wink: I actually love watching movies (just didn't ...

Hello everyone! I thought I should be polite and introduce myself before I start posting things all over the place, so here I am. Depending on how interested you are, ...

Thanks for the comment :) Well, when I used moth-voice, I did not really think of it as "the voice of a moth", it was more about implying that the ...

I am impressed. Your use of imagery is great and the rhyming works out very well. It's the first work of yours that I read, but I will definitely keep ...