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Ooh I love this story! :P Even though she did not usually care what others thought of her, she did not want to earn herself a reputation as a crackpot. ...

I also agree it could do with being a shortened post...however I LOVED THIS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I liked it, but there were some places with commas unneeded. "So leave me broken-- to disappear, into dust." Maybe "So leave me broken, to disappear into dust." would be ...

I like it. It's a fast moving story which is nice, the "Gray" city part was kinda random, as someone else mentioned... Also, why are her and her mom on ...