Master_Yoda

5/10 - I never say things I regret. But more seriously, while this does raise my curiosity, it doesn't establish a character or a scene or a specific stage in ...

7/10. Establishes character mood effectively. Fails to place reader in any concrete context. I'd read on. Jon scrubbed the meat-cleaver with a ragged sponge, and the water, tinged red, slid ...

I ate a giant margherita pizza!

Gonna try my hand at this again: The storm rolled across the heavens, thundering a snarl through midnight's breath; carrying terror on her back. Wow, I'm not very good at ...

In sexy black leathers, she swung her leg over the saddle and dismounted her motorbike, tugging at her belt as she stowed the key. She wound a lock of hair ...

There once was a thread in the forum, that contained far too much decorum. 'twas passed through a grater and a lymerick later emerged far less gloomy and borin'

I want to leave this thread, I do, So eat this couplet I brewed for you.

When life gives you lemons, you can eat all the garlic you want.

They say when you used to walk through the streets of Katmandu in thin bikini garb, they'd look at you funny. Palaces around you were plated in gold. And when ...

Wet pages; grey streaks aren't words.

Hey Retro, This is a very comprehensive review. It is quite well written as well. In terms of suggestions, the best I can do is offer a little advice about ...

The paragraph is beautifully descriptive and vivid. It begins to show emotion. Still, it develops no tension of any kind and therefore fails to grip tightly. I'd rate it with ...

Brisngr (I might have spelt that wrong). No you spelled it right Christopher Paolini spelled it wrong. ;) I would recommend The Bartimaeus Trilogy by Jonathan Stroud. Also Sabriel by ...

Most people on YWS will tell you that names are important. I'm of the belief that they're not unless they have certain significance with regard to meanings in fantasy or ...

Her mind was open as a steel door bolted shut with a sign upon it declaring -Keep Out!-