Master_Yoda

Yours is done, Lava. Getting to yours, Skins. :)

Hi Lava On the whole I think this is a very nice essay. You come across as a confident and skilled girl. There are a couple of points I'd like ...

Since I've been writing my own essays recently, I've also sort of developed technique in writing personal essays. I'll do it with pleasure, Lava :)

Hi Everyone When I first joined YWS a while ago, I never really had one of these threads, so I decided to make one now. For those of you who ...

As many of you know, my activity on YWS has been very limited for the past year. I've been on a post high school program which allows me very little ...

A/N: Hi everyone. I've been gone for quite a while. Please drop by to tell me what you think of the story. If you don't feel like reviewing it and ...

Yo Quill I've got to say, you got me floored here. This is one of the best pieces of fantasy I've read on YWS for a long time. Your characters ...

Interesting, Exception. I like your prose's base. It's not too fancy. It's easy to read. It's fast paced. You do need to try to ensure that your grammar is up ...

Wow, Stoney, Very interesting indeed. First things first: Way too confusing. I want dialogue tags! I want dialogue tags! Yep, it takes serious mental strain merely to work out who's ...

Hey Miniauthor, I really want to review this story as I am convinced that you have the capabilities required to become an awesome writer. Still, as per usual, I've got ...

Hey Kara I'm really liking this piece of yours. You have all the elements to a great short story: An amazing world, a brilliantly descriptive dialogue, a heap of tension, ...

Hey Megg, I hate to play around with condescension so, but for thirteen years old you're a great writer. There's a real well of talent floating around YWS these days. ...

Yo Jagg So, we already discussed the fact that I find the story way too unfocused for my liking. First and foremost develop drive. Let's see what we can add ...

Hi there Brooklyn This was quite an interesting piece, I must say. You lay the foundations of what might become a really wonderful story. Well done. :) Firstly, I'd like ...

Hey Salmon :) Let's just say, I rather think you have great potential. I don't know how much value this has as a Short Story, but I would certainly consider ...