Master_Yoda

Where are all the Canadians coming from? I love it. Canada, obviously.

Go lick my face, Yoda. Go lick my face. That sounds dirty for anyone with an immaturity level as high as mine.

First things first. Breathe in. Once you've done that you can breathe out. :D Good, now that we have oxygen, we can move forward. I am the only cold hearted ...

Hi Rosey, Here's a review for you. I have very mixed feelings about this piece. I think the idea is very clever. Your characterization of Damian is also strong. The ...

Yo Dudette, Not your best. Why? Well, I think the answer is fairly simple. Why are you getting inspiration from Paramore? :P You should be getting inspired by U2 or ...

Congratulations UV :)

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The Wise Man's Fear by Patrick Rothfuss Also, High Lord's Fury by Jim Butcher

Okay Luxe. Here's your promised review. The following review is going to focus on story telling techniques that I think might help you develop the tension and adrenaline a scene ...

Review Day = The Shabizzle!

Okay, so with the chapter completed, I can make further points that I wouldn't have made until now. One of my pet peeves is tension killing. See, you have very ...

Wow. This is a breathtaking piece of writing. Your prose is a s fresh as ever and your world building is spectacular. There really is nothing to say. Characters are ...

Hi Griff, Not bad at all. I thought the humor was subtle and effectively conveyed. This is too short an excerpt for me to properly judge. There are a couple ...

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The paragraph is beautifully descriptive and vivid. It begins to show emotion. Still, it develops no tension of any kind and therefore fails to grip tightly. I'd rate it with ...