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Hey there, A. Phauox. Welcome to YWS! This poem is obviously very polished and original-thanks for a break from grammatical errors :) Actually, it was hard to find things wrong ...

*bats eyelashes* Genre: Other Fiction Title: Dr./Mr. Vangerguard-Milton Link: Please, be as harsh as you need to be. Much appreciated ;-)

Hi peace. I'm glad you didn't go too dramatic in this poem, which is what suicide poems tend to be. However, there were a couple of things that bothered me. ...

Hullo! I think moon jumper covered the important things, like grammar. I actually just read her corrected version instead of your grammarless one, which was a lot less confusing. Thanks ...

I walk this road, I walk this road. Alone in travels, travels. The light does not show, does not show. I'm escorted to the gallows, gallows. Interesting repetition here. I'm ...

Hey panda! Welcome to YWS. I just wanted to say I agree with the above comments (except, you know, who knows what you've experienced at 13? :)) and add one ...

Hi Beemarie! I shall be reviewing your poem tonight. *bows* This is an interesting idea for a poem-very original which is great. However, the main thing I noticed is that ...

No problem :D If you want, you can click 'edit' on the upper right side of your post and edit your poem, you don't have to post a new one.

Hey darko! Welcome to YWS. First off, this is quite an interesting piece. I like the way you took MLK's speech and made it into a poem. However, there are ...

Hello Henry! kissthewitch here, ready to review your poem. There are a few mechanical things to sort out, so I'll start with those: So I've been there at a certain ...

*blinks* Wow. I loved this. It's so simple, but every word means something. You know? Not one of those words is unnecessary. And it's a fairly quiet poem, but then ...

Hey Becca! Welcome to YWS. This is an interesting beginning to a poem-I say beginning because it's a little too short. True, poems can be any length, but this one ...

Hiya Princess! kissthewitch here to review your poem! First of all, just a couple things: But why [s]has[/s] have so many echoed with a single siren ' s blare. against ...

Hello ButterFlyInk! I'm kissthewitch, here to review your piece! First of all, is this a poem? It's written like prose, whereas poetry usually has more line breaks. Try breaking it ...

Hey! I'm kissthewitch and I'll be reviewing this tonight. First of all, as requested, the words: the only one I saw was 'music' in the very first sentence. But I ...