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Oh also, change 'extreme lonely feeling' to 'extreme lonliness.' Okay, nit-picking really over this time, I promise.

Let me be very, very clear: THIS DOESN'T SUCK. This doesn't even resemble sucking. Remember that. I agree, it is a bit cliche. That can be a horrible, terrible, story-killing ...

Hello! First of all, your story reminds me very much of a series called Daughters of the Moon (with girls fighting demons, or in this case brownies, etc) which is ...

I'm going with the king. Vanilla Ice is way cool. As is Sir Mix-a-lot. 8)

I bought my brother a sixteen percent alcohol concentrated beer for Christmas. He was dismayed because he feels that the high alcohol content takes away from the taste. Anyway, I ...

I would LOVE an indepth critique. Actually, you did review the first part of it, when there were parts, but now I've glomped it all into one big thing. So ...

Hold up. Do you not need one anymore? "No, I'm on time. All your clocks must be wrong."

Hello again. Just finished your prologue, so now I'm moving on to chapter 1 8) I'm going to start with the icky mechanical stuff: Okay, so the first thing I ...

Hey Maki-Chan-I'm here to review your prologue! First of all, I don't know what Silent Hill is, but this first part was interesting, with the disappearance and everything. I don't ...

Hello! kissthewitch here as requested :) So usually Fantasy Fiction turns me off, but reading your piece I was pleasantly surprised. It's not blatantly fantasy, eg, unicorns dancing in a ...

Hello WaterVyper! I like your poem, especially the first stanza, actually. I like all the contradictions too-I'm not sure that you need 'but' to get your point across. I think ...

Yeah, I agree with Haruno Sakura. This whole thing is like nonstop sexsexsexsexsexsex...it's kind of gross. You definitely need a rating. And, as Sakura said, this whole thing never went ...

Hey Adam. You have an interesting piece of work here. I'm not sure it's actually a poem , since you don't use poetic devices like rhyme, line breaks, etc. Of ...

Hi Katie. I'm kissthewitch, here to review your poem (don't worry, I'm not the bashing type :)). First of all, a couple things jumped out at me: Quote: How could ...

Hey 1dering. I'm going to do kind of the same thing that darko did, as in, editing it, but I'll try not to change the emotion too much! For some ...