Mars

Hello! Being that our parents always dreamed of having a huge family I don't like the 'being that'. It sounds weird and sounding weird is not a good way to ...

Hello! Let me first say that I agree with Music on all the grammar points; fill it up with commas and the right dialogue tags and it will be so ...

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I adore this one as well. The words flowed nicely, and there are some good images there. As time is faltered. How can something be faltered? Perhaps you could use ...

I've never heard it, either in the Midwestern USA or Northern UK. ^^

april 22. but that's life eh all those missed opportunities and unspoken confessions and lost regrets just won't leave me alone. april 23. stranger i wish today were ugly. i ...

Hello! Inside a plastic girl, within a plastic shell, Lives a lonely girl begging for attention. What I don't like about this is the repetition of the word girl. It ...

Thanks Angel; I really appreciate the work you put into your review, and I'll use it, but I've decided to work on this part and the rest for awhile, and ...

Hey! So pick up your clothes and back your bags. *pack So. This piece was quite pretty, I like the way it begins as the narrator coaxing along his lover, ...

Let me say, first of all, I absolutely love this, and not just because I can relate to it. :P I have two issues. One, the in my dark room ...

Hello! He walks and walks to not go home, So there are a couple of things you could mean here: is he walking so he doesn't have to go home? ...

I love your title. :P So, here goes. danced in the dessert dry, *desert, with one s. A dessert is the sweet stuff you eat after a meal. steeling goods ...

Hello! Welcome to YWS! One of our rules is to spread the love; eg, please review two other works before you post your own, and keep the 2:1 ratio. That ...

Clo! I love that you're holding a Day of Silence paper, I have about a thousand of the same ones. :D

I didn't forget! I've just been sans computer for a week. april 15. voulez-vous? like, maybe your perfectly scripted lines and whenever-you-feel-like-it phone calls cannot be enough to make up ...