Mars

april 26.

*pokes*

Hello! Welcome to YWS, Soul (if I can call you that). We have this rule that you should review two works by others before you post your own (and keep ...

Hm, I like this. It's simply and prettily written, and flows quite nicely. One thing I would change is the 'my' in the fourth line. Seems out of place and ...

Hello! This poem has a couple of swear words in it - please rate it R. :) Every night she’d pray to you, But every day you ignore the truth. ...

Please: It's a switching viewpoints short story, so my main concerns are a) whether it's too confusing/difficult to follow and b) whether I've tried to cram too much plot into ...

april 25 sonnet xxx she knows all this thinking is getting her nowhere. but the cycle continues, night after night cause every time he tries to tell her he cares ...

For a creative writing contest at my school, deadline May 4, maximum 1500 words, so reviews are very much needed/appreciated. Especially tell me if it's too confusing, because I'm worried ...

Hello again! Is this a sonnet? I love sonnets. And this looks like an English one; ABABCDCDEFEFGG. Except you have one extra quatrain, so I suppose not a proper one. ...

Hey closetwriter, welcome to YWS. :) One of our rules is to keep a 2:1 ratio of reviews to your own works posted, so we can make sure everyone gets ...

Hello! I must agree. This was very nice, and not just because it's one of my favorite types of poetry (and, incidentally, the one I'm worst at). I especially loved ...

Hey! So, I really liked this. Especially the 'let the floods flow on' lines. Lovely, as you're using the sound of fl twice in a row actually sounds like flowing, ...

I had to comment on this, because I adore the way you wrote the voice of the Scottish guy. At least I assume he's Scottish, since you're in Scotland. So ...

You knew how old I was.

I think it's fine. Besides, being cliche isn't necessarily a bad thing.