Mars

He was always so kind to me, only to me, until enchanted with her smile, he cast me aside and married her under the sweet orange tree. I never knew ...

Hey Bryan! The rule here is to do two reviews for every work of your own that you post, so as to keep the site running and whatnot. If you're ...

Hello! Within the pages of this book, A secret has been buried; Encoded with words of today; Hidden by an unknown author. Very, very nice first stanza; it sets up ...

are there any guidelines to the critiquing? Yes, there are. I suggest you check out these articles: Hopefully they'll help. ^^ Sometimes harshness is a good thing, sometimes it's not; ...

Hey Thunder! A (belated) welcome to YWS. This poem is heartbreakingingly sweet, I think. I really like how when I saw the title, I figured the three words would be ...

Hello! as the spider’s stand, waiting. Should this be spiders, without the apostrophe, if it's plural? That's the only way it makes sense, although later you only mention one spider ...

(Same with the SAT: ess ay tee. Try saying 'a ess.' :D)

This is a really good thread, I think. Today I talked to someone that I miss.

Okay, first of all, I'm sososososososo sorry this has taken so long. she probably shouldn’t of said those words *shouldn't have But again it faded into this girl, standing before ...

Back as requested. ^^ the tips of it was so blonde it looked white Should be were so blond, as tips is plural. I think you could also cut out ...

Exp, I'm going to attempt to do an actual critique here, but you should know that I was already LOLing at 'honey bunches of oats.' :P A quick note: I ...

Hello! I am growing closer. My end is near. I cannot cope anymore. Someone save me. Please? I think this is a fairly weak way to open a poem; it's ...

Hey! I very much liked this, Suzie. You told us just enough through the medical staff, and Asher and Danni, and even though I don't know how Bliss lost her ...

Whoa...how have you gone a week without reviews?! :P I'm going to start out being picky - correcting grammar, maybe rewording if it sounds stiff, then I'll go on to ...

This is epically sweet. The only thing I don't like is how you describe it as a PURE white daisy before saying it has a purple streak because, wouldn't that ...