Mars

Hi Persy :) I love this poem. Love love love it. Especially the last stanza and very last line, which are both very strong. The best part is that most ...

Hi Lindsay :) I like this poem a lot although I do have a couple of suggestions, which will be bolded below. There is a time in life, no comma ...

Hi Brie! The only part where the tense was off that I could find is this one: The tug on my arm is strong enough to pull me loose. \ ...

Hey Phoenix! This is a very cool piece, I love how you've taken the main character's internal conflict and made it into a monster. Very powerful imagery. The main complaint ...

Hi Becca! I really like this piece and I definitely have a sense of who you are after reading it. Since it's going to be for University admissions, it needs ...

sanctuary my body is an ivory cage where all is chrysalis-bound; no butterflies of words so sage can on my tongue be found and every clever thought is swallowed to ...

Hi! I'll start with the first poem (logically) and then move on to the next. Do they have titles yet? Or, if the first one is called 'Oh, My Dear ...

You get my 300th review :D I think this is a lovely lovely poem, Hols, so I'm going to pick at a small relatively insignificant (but still significant) matter. While ...

Why was Demeter still green but Rosey was pink? Anywhoodlydoodly, I'll be fine with whatever happens; I don't think having badges or keeping colors will drastically change any of our ...

If you can review this, I will send you a million bajillion virtual cookies. :)

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A sidewalk ocean broken softly by sky tears drip-drop sounds like home Gravel-studded road flanked by horses and fences; a place no cars go. Nature's beauty will not be confined ...

This haiku IS 5-7-5 actually. Haha, that wasn't very clear of me. I know yours is 5 7 5; what I was saying is, yes, that means it is a ...

HAPPY (late) BIRTHDAY GRANDMA!!!! Caps and extra punctuation necessary.

Hey blackpencil. So, haikus are awesome, and technically they only have to be 5 7 5. But usually, they're about a scene in nature, and I think this is because ...