MarciEvans

My grandmother used to tell me a story about a young girl who lived in a small village named cornwald, the village lay nestled in between two large mountains and ...

I like it but agree with Halogirl. Try being a bit more discriptive, and make sure your readers can easily see the time line. Other then that,really good!

I realy loved was powerful and had me at the edge of my seat. I had my breath held the entire time while she was looking at the body;s of ...

I liked was really simple and nice. Just cute and fun to read.

Wow, This is one of the most powerful things i have read in a long while. I was truly moved, great job!

This is really good, It makes me feel as if i'm listening to a real person speak. I know it can sometimes be difficult to write such a personal narative, ...

This Is really good! It caught my attention after the first sentence!!

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