MandaPanda1031

Your such a good writer, I can't write with dialoge that good. :( Maybe you should teach me. Very interesting story.... It seems like romance or something I didn't catch ...

Just so you know Rylee is my fav name of all time! Considering that I have a novel with the character named Rylee and a girl named Ryila. Inspired by ...

Wow, I love everything except I think you could improve on the nose and the shoes. Nose- It's a bit large and it's fine if that's how you wanted it, ...

Please read- First off, I know I write a lot of stores. I just love writing even though I know I'm not that great.... Thanks so much for reading & ...

I think they can bring them into their homes if they're in a really bad situtation. Whateve, maybe it's just not a good novel. :(

Underlined-fragments red-corrections blue-my comments Zoey Please, stop... I thought as the car revved along the motorway. Bizarre sounds came from the right of me as Luke continued drumming the steer

You should review my novel. I'm going to post Chapter 1, because in order to understand chapter 2, you need chapter 1 but I want you to review chapter 2

Flancel Girl who has fair skin and dark brown hair that curls clockwise. Soft pink lips and a beautiful smile with shining ice blue eyes. Her face is rather ovalish ...

"Go to your room Ryila!" Father shouted at me. I obeyed him and started to my room. "No Ryila, stay here." I stopped in my tracks and turned around, but ...

Green-Fragment Red-correction blue-my comments Kierra Kiera or Kyra reared on her hind legs, thumping her paws against the trash can. It was not the silver kind she was used to ...

"Hello Ryila." Mom weekly walked into my room. She pulled 'Shrek' out of my bookshelf and sat next to me on the bed. "Dear Ryila." She fluffed my hair and ...

Wow! Very nicely written. I'm eagar to find out why the mom bit the dad. I loved this, and am going to read more. Underline: Fragments Red: Corrections Blue: My ...

Wow! Very nicely written. I'm eagar to find out why the mom bit the dad. I loved this, and am going to read more. Underline: Fragments Red: Corrections Blue: My ...

Please reivew my new story "Losing it all"

100% true but motified. I was returning from that walk to nowhere, we were together, I'd just been thinking about what would happen if we'd been torn appart. I'd decided ...