Mageheart

You're welcome! I think the main thing with the grammar is the dialogue advice I went over in one of my other reviews, and your run-on sentences. Which are all ...

You're welcome! I do like how you've been editing your story. (I did see your wall post about holding off on edits until you're done, which works too!)

You're welcome! I'm glad it could help you out!

Oh, okay! That's pretty interesting. I'm guessing my family knew about it because we're all science nerds? And I think the internet might have played a part in that, too. ...

You're welcome! When I get a chance to review that next chapter - which should hopefully be very soon - I'll make sure to tell you my thoughts on that. ...

Yes. I am.

I didn't want to say this in the review because it's not technically part of this chapter, but I saw what you did with Percival. :P

Sorry for the late reply, but yes! A longer period of time would definitely accomplish the effect I was suggestion.

Thanks so much for the review! I really appreciate your advice on anything and I'll work on all of it. If you don't mind, could you please answer the questions ...

Hello, and thanks for the review! I ended up using Ryan later in the chapter because there was other male characters, so I'll try to add more of his name ...

Hello, and thanks for this review! I'm glad that this got you hooked. I'm currently not planning on posting anymore of my novel at the moment, but I'll tag you ...

By the way, I'm sorry for not doing it yesterday like I promised I would!

By the way, I'm sorry for not doing it yesterday like I promised I would!

I sense some good old internet humor coming from this poem - specifically Tumblr! Thanks for writing something that could make me smile!

Thanks for the review! If I ever do pick up this old project again, I'll make sure to go into further description of the characters in the future chapters.