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Waterlily, Hmm... I'm still deciding if this is a good piece or a bad one. Nitpicks: I cry for many reasons; he hit me, no one will be able to ...

Kadie, I quite liked this. I didn't think there was much wrong with your grammar. First of all, I agree with Ofir when they stated that your character needs a ...

Nice, Classy. One thing that annoyed me and didn't make sense was this line: How many of them did he want with him, so they could comfort each other? All ...

Mochi: Yay, a writer who is able to make distinct characters! -jumps for joy- One nitpick: He was clean cut , with dark , serious eyes and an expensive suit. ...

Hi Rayqua: Haha, loved the ending! Onto the nitpicks: A flying car was spotted touching down on the ground, and I could not help but stare in pure awe as ...

Hi Quet, I love your story, but you really cannot use commas and paragraphs properly. It was hard for me in some places to read. Here's a example: “You want ...

I felt like I was reading a overview of a movie, rather then a story. Seriously. Your story is all "this happened, then this happened and then this happened." and ...

My intention was to make you confused. I'm glad it worked :)

You mentioned somewhere that Maxxie was a male. And I went "wait, what?" I know I haven't read the previous chapters, but Maxxie seriously sounds like a girl. It's the ...

You didn't tell me, I guessed. My username is so not original, it is original .

Good! These rules, like you mentioned above, are not often said. :) Thanks for explaining this!

Anzhela, Bibiana and Derrel were still laughing, as if someone just told them, [lose comma] the best joke ever. I felt hurt. Lucas still wasn’t laughing, [put a ; instead] ...

Hi Kaile, I want you to please critique something that technically isn't fanfiction. It's my own story, but written in the style of R.L.Stine's Goosebump novels. I would love if ...

Hi Winter, I want you to critque something that technically isn't fanfiction. It's my own story, but written in the style of R.L.Stine's Goosebump novels. Think you can handle it? ...

No, sorry Biffel. :( I wouldn't know how to critque one.