MadamKroft

I enjoyed this chapter, but I did get kind of lost in it! I'll show you where. :) From the beginning to I glare at him. The pain subsides, but ...

Once again, wow! I'm loving this story so far! I found only minor errors. I also have seen a heavy use of commas. I would try to be careful about ...

I actually thought the way that Carsten died was to the point and perfectly fine. Not everyone has to die a long and sorrowful death! :) The second Guard holds ...

This chapter really was spectacular with imagery! I could picture the whole chapter happening in my head without becoming confused. All I'm going to do is review a few things, ...

I feel like this part is pretty long and needs to be shortened, but that's more of an opinion, and it was still a great part even with its length! ...

I think the idea behind this is absolutely fascinating! I would love to keep reading more, but I do feel like the Chapter/ Part is a bit long. I'm no ...

Hello! I really enjoyed this chapter, but it does need some editing. Most of the editing that it needs is minor and easily fixable. I hope you don't take my ...

I really enjoyed this chapter! I'm simply going to point out a few things that, I personally feel, need to be looked at again. You don't have to change any ...

Oh, Megsug, you are so great at writing! I, as a reader, get easily confused and so please take no personal offense to the issues I have at understanding some ...