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Hey Omar, *{It all happened on that – that cursed day} I don't see why use the hyphon. *{The Son of Zeus and Jupiter met together and divided the land} ...

Hey Penguin, Your title would grab anyone who had rad the "Hunger Games", However your first two or three paragraphs, the "Who am I?" , the "Who is he?" and ...

Hey sushi, the title you gave your story is catchy, it gives an impression of magic and adventure. after the first part of the chapter, in wich crey's parents are ...

Hi MRHILL92, i'm here to review your first fantasy story. Anyway, the title of the story is catchy and I like it, it would make a great title for the ...

{It allowed me to concentrate on school and swim doesn't just feel right, i think it should be swimming not swim. {It totally went wide and landed near the toilet ...