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Great writing, I really liked this chapter. However, I thought the ending was a bit predictable, with Leila finding Tara a 'better mother' explained so blatantly. Maybe show it gradually ...

Interesting premise, but maybe add some more action in the plot. I'm not sure if this is a story by itself of part of one, but it seems more like ...

Nice story. I like that you show Rose's inner conflicts through her thoughts. A couple of suggestions: You should make up a name for the rock band, just to add ...

Great essay and definitely very informative. It's unfortunate that most people, including myself, have tainted and biased opinions on disorders such as autism and Tourette syndrome, due to the media's

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I remember reading this kids' book, The Teacher's Funeral or something, that was horrible. Plot was flat and uninteresting, characters were not memorable, and the whole thing was just really ...

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I read your previous chapter, and I'm glad that this one is just as good. Your descriptions are very strong, especially the part with the picture-burning. However, there were a ...

I can really relate to poor Leila. My mother can be like that about my grades. Seriously though, good story. I liked the first sentence, where you compared the report ...

This is a beautiful poem that really brings to life the quiet energy of the forest. The atmosphere created is amazing, one can feel the overwhelming presence of nature. I ...

I thought about adding captions, but I couldn't decide what words would match each picture. As for number 4 not fitting in, that picture is the reason behind 'No matter ...

Thank you. 1) Nobody I've shown it to knows what it is, except me. I'll keep it a mystery, but maybe someone will figure it out. 2) I think there's ...

I like how your poem, like Pgsgirl7 said, is an innovative way of carrying the message of that old saying. To the point when the stone Flings. My head bears ...

I agree with Dream_Catcher about the language and style of the poem. To me it felt a bit like a lecture or an informational text. More 'poetic' words or figurative ...

I like the last two lines best. The powerful contrast ends the poem on a moving note. The lovely scarlet at my breast flows now like a chocked stream. Do ...