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Re: Weeping
No punctuation. Strange, incoherent lines. Halfway through, the poem barely made any sense. In the end, it still didn't make much sense, due to the poor execution and grammar. Try ...
May 15, 2010 -
Re: The Taste of Sky
You have a good concept here. Now your only problems are the small amounts of metaphor and imagery. It's all quite literal and solid, not much that the reader has ...
May 14, 2010 -
Re: Dark Decision
Thank you too everyone who reviewed my poem and thanks for the santaz's tips too.But, MHD that was really over-rated dude,seriously. i really felt this way.But to the others thanks ...
May 14, 2010 -
Re: Dark Decision
Sorry if I come across as harsh with this critique. Ahem... Your style of poetry is boring, concrete like a brick wall. Poetry is the art of words forming images ...
May 13, 2010
