Luvzi12

Thanks for the comments everyone! They mean a lot, I love that everyone takes time out to comment and offer advice, thank you all so much!

I think it should be untied the just sounds a little better. Thanks! I knew that didn't sound right :D

I hope this helped! I know I was kind of vague, but it's hard to explain beyond that. You have to take one step at a time with writing. The ...

Cry and Hype don't really rhyme. And normally I am all for stretching the rhyming and all, but that doesn't work. Thanks, I'm aware it doesn't rhyme, it used to ...

I really liked this, particuarly the rythm. I'm sorry I have no criticism! I really enjoyed it!