LukanRinta

You had me hooked from the first stanza. When I started reading it, I had music playing, but by the end of the second stanza I couldn't even hear it ...

very cool :) Short but sweet. :) I've never seen Lord of the Rings though.

I agree with the other comments. Your wording and rhythm was great in the beginning, then you started rhyming. you began forcing yourself and thinking too much. I true poem ...

I'm still learning in this area myself, but I thought your rhythm was off. You had some lines rhyming, and others that didn't. I also saw that you attempted to ...