LucidDreamerLost

This was awesome. I loved the feeling. That's the way I understand things, really. Beautiful flow, like a song, like a dream, like I like it. Great images, great word ...

heh, yeah buddy. I like it, I do I do I do, yeah buddy. The ending's weird, ends as "we're alive," but every indication...shows that he's/she's gonna die. Erm? Just ...

haha, I like it a lot. "Someone please give me an illusion of a miraculous cabaret shining into eternity. For the first time my layers are transparent. Above me lies ...

humid night supreme motions of pendulum stars across the falling, opening, unwielding sky crystal dances fill the world’s bars the minds of the people are slowly being poisoned and blood ...

this was the most perfect thing I've ever read, haha. thanks for it.

the ending was my favorite part, "this is love." ouch.

I'm a writing major in college, so lemme give this a little going-over... Prologue, Part One: The Day the World Knew Sunday evening in an astrology laboratory deep inside the ...

wow, awesome. Real good words, real good feeling. I like it. "Laugh, cerise lips, on the jade knoll, Slow over the fruitless, undulance of sleep. Beguile the loveless, the lifeless, ...

the waves, they blow me out to sea, 21 years old, and youthful celebrations burning up the nights, electric postings on TYWC, or, at least, so I believed... so long ...

you should put an accent mark over the e in "cursed" (first line)--improves the flow, just feels right. Again on 3rd line of 3rd stanza. Fifth stanza, I don't know ...

what is snooze?

first paragraph...seems very mature, definitely for an older audience. imaginable, imaginable (paragraph 2) [ edited out ]I got no further. peace This is a young writers' site. Please keep the ...

If I had written this, I would be super-proud of it. Kudos, my man. It's f***ing brill Please no swearing in comments, even if it's meant to be a compliment. ...

Thoreau's meadows? You look at a girl and you think about Thoreau? And you expect your audience to be that lame too?

dear Robdawg, I write this drunk, very profoundly (probably), but not stoned because I have quit that for fear that I would end up doing anything else and not knowing ...