Lorraine

There are plenty of really beautiful sentences, and they made your writing very charming :) For example... (“Alright—Susie I—” he paused, his eyes searching the sky for words. They weren’t ...

I really like the way you describe feelings and motion. I agree with GML too---reading something longer written by you would be nice. There's something poetic in here, and it ...

I think this is going to be an interestingly enchanting story. I like the way you started and the part with Mr. Richards and the officer. Nice characterization with Miss ...

A special way to tell a story. Great! I really like the story idea-creative and very lively. To me, the whole piece still has space to work on, for example ...

Hi, this is my first reply. Sorry for not really knowing how... I enjoyed this piece and felt excited reading it. The atmosphere was good and it attracted me, but ...