LordFabulous

Darn me and typos, we're like two peas in a pod (sort of). :D I will get this sorted so thank you for letting me know

Thank you for the review! I didn't notice some of these things, so I will get them sorted. Thank you for bringing them up :)

Thank you for the review. I shall sort this out asap, i've got a lot of editing to do :)

Thank you for the review! :) I shall get to work again to try and add some tension, it's nice to get the feedback so I can improve

Thank you for the review :) Glad you enjoyed it

Thank you for the review! :) Winthrop is just that sort of evil man, sounds nice at first, but he gets worse trust me! As for the rest, that's a ...

Thanks for the review, I will do some editing so thank you very much :)

Thank you for the review! I shall get to work on this asap :)

Thank you very much for the review! I shall see what I can do to adjust her emotions. The idea of her is she is a cold character mainly due ...

No problem, I may have been wrong but I thought it was the 10th aha :)

No problem, and I always find some of the best work doesn't quite make sense :D

I have broken up the paragraphs a bit I hope it's better to read now :)

Thank you again for the review. I am glad you are enjoying the story, and as I said in the last one I am going to try and shorten paragraphs, ...

Thank you for the review! I had not realised that my story was similar to yours! :) I will edit the paragraphs later and make sure that's sorted out, and ...

Thank you for the review! :) I will get to work on editing those things, but overall this story is just meant to be a narrative, and it was originally ...