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for all you script writers out there (if any), do you think you could give me a little help? Pm me if you think you can. Im thinking of writing ...

yeah whatever bubbles! you dont like peaches, so who cares what you think *pokes tongue out*

still no jelly in the dialogue at the end, and there were things like sad faces and the word sis that arent in books. consider changing them as well, then ...

youre welcome! :D I like jelly

See, I don't get why it doesn't make any sense. Because theres no jelly.

but it still remained confusing to me. I agree with that, and with misty. a)Theres no hook. People are going to read this easily because its short, but be thinking ...

this is a bit of an improvement to some other work ive read, but you still have things like Jane let out a sigh of frustration. Why it was making ...

i love this!!! i love those drawings!!

*gets on bitch hat, but discovers Misty took it* HEY! I CANT CRITIQUE WITHOUT MY BITCH HAT :(

what does this poem have to do with a napkin?

... that is so eerie... ... BUT I STILL LOVE IT!!!

good heavens. Goodbye!!! :(

dont bother reading this. i had to post it so i could access it at my mums heap of poop computer, and my email isnt working. Hi Lucy, Thanks for ...

ok 1) grif, i dont get it. 2)both of you just chill out.

squallz! relax, ok? karma said fantasy wasnt their thing, so they couldve critiqued how they would say, romance fiction or horror. Dont get all worked up.