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Wow, I thought that was cute! Even if it did have a naughty word (**giggles**) on it. Well done! Make more!

Yes, actually. Uh... um... Well, you've critted almost everything -anyway-

it was not! What was begging for you to crit is something crit worthy! Gah! Go crit something -recent-, something I actually -care- about! XD

I think it's ok when you're doing speech, or the sort of "diary" form, something I call "informal first person", which is sloppy anyway, so a few ands and buts ...

... Mat, didn't I tell you to leave this alone? **is mad**

Three was my favourite. The hair was done really well, although the arms seemed a bit life-less. Kudos.

My favourite was the "Remembrance" one. It worked really well in black and white, probably because it would have been grey in colour too. "Stretch" was good, too. Kudos.

That was encouraging? Or were you sarcastic. I can't tell sarcasm anymore... XD

This was nice, even though it did press religion a little. I don't know how to crit it properly, because I don't know what it is and so I have ...

Well... this was... odd. Very dialogue dependant, which made it weird and a little irritating. Also, what's meant to be going on? I'm so confused...

Ye know I luff you, but I have a bone to pick. The first sentence, the hook and the vital point in a story (along with a start, problem, climax, ...

I don't know. It seems a bit "Read the plot without slugging through 200+ pages" to me. Might just be my own opinion. I think that these people who wander ...

Haha, I'm re-writing this whole story, Pingi, so your crit is pretty much useless.

Ok, the first thing I noticed? You don't seem to know how to use ellipses. In all the places you used them, it would have been more appropriate to use ...

The text message went something like: "Joan, just a quick message to wish you and Brian a Happy Easter and all the best for 1982, from all of us at ...