Loose

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Chase was working in the fields when the bell for dinner was by his little sister, Trudy, She's Fifteen. What a horrid opening sentence. You basically tell us everything, very ...

The Saints are Coming

I found that this part was a bit awkward and fast, and as Sumi mentioned- the transition from evening to dawn is pretty slack. I definately think you can improve ...

Layleun>> I do! Mar came over yesterday and we took lots of photos. Me when she tried to surprise me with a photo. Us with the sunnies ^^

Tissue paper isn't a good simile for an apple's gentleness, as toilet paper is more associated with things like poop, toilet, wee. Tissue paper isn't toilet paper, Andy.

I have no idea what inspired me to write this, but I have. I think it is a bit icky, especially towards the end, but that's your opinion in the ...

Hello

My Itty Bitty! That was taken a few months ago, when I opened my drawer and found Bitty had wriggled her way in there.

9. one of my friend got new thick-rimmed glasses today, they look nice. Isn't that a fact about your friend , not you?

Leaving the grammar stuff aside, as you wanted, I'll simply state what bugged me. I know this is part one, but there is still room for background. You leave us ...

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I loved this book. When I first read it, the chapter numbers distressed me so I through it across my room. A few months later I found it again, read ...

I live in Australia, with gun laws, and the only shootings we ever have are involved in bikie gangs. And we're better off for it. I grow tired of hearing ...

The name "Bippity"