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Thanks guys. I really like the twist I have, and it seems rather surprising. When I first wrote this, I realised that there was nothing written about incest, and I ...

Aurora Addison 17 - Quiet - Shy - Always reading - Not very open You shouldn't be telling us that. You should be showing us. If you feel you get ...

Ok, I have a few complaints... Apparently, so back to more important I think that between "apparently" and the rest of the sentence, there should be more of a pause ...

Numbers 3 and 4 were the only ones I really found interesting. 2 needed the cars cropped out, and 1 leaved very little to the imagination. The lighting for 3 ...

This piece seems incomplete. You begin talking of a task set before the MC, then you talk about how they travel, then you introduce us to a conversation they had, ...

Wow... ok... . Signs of a brief struggle were evident, but the assailant had won, and her grandfather was dead for three days before a neighbor found him. Adrian shuddered ...

The lips and the bottom of the nose could do with a bit of sprucing up, but other than that, Pierre seems very sexy for a drawing.

Wow. Prok, this was sensational. It was like a fairy tale for adults for most of the beginning. "Depends which town you mean." His voice sounded rough and unused. "Ashur, ...

I have a problem with you calling him a "retard" in the final line and the title. Surely you could find a more aggressive, suitable word. Calling someone a "Retard" ...

I don't come across any errors using Internet Explorer, so I shun your suggestion to convert to FireFox!

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yes please. **puppy dog eyes**

Ok, that font is disgusting. What ever happened to classic font? Everyone is making theirs ugly. Please, fix it!

but all I could find was clouds that...

Fortunately, they were deaf and didn't hear when everyone was whisked away by a race car.