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I'm in Name: Max Novel Johnson Age(15-17): Turns 15 on the day of the crash Interests: He likes to make up tactics on paper and imagine being in a war ...

Thanks for the review Hippie, can you guess who Carter is stereotyped after?

A short, bald, plump man in a pin striped suit walked stressfully backstage of the Freedom Theater. He was perspiring between the heat of being backstage, the tight suit and ...

Good plot. To answer your question directly, no it's not a good way to write: present tense. Near the end you said I am looking at that card now, as ...

Hmm... I could feel the potential but you couldn't hook me. However you managed to draw out a rough outline of what I think your story is going to be ...

Very Funny story and touching at the end. I read through your story again and didn't find anything to correct, well done. Well nothing that I should be correcting just ...

I'm writing a story called the Janitors, based in America although I don't live there. I'm just wodnering what states you'd want a group of six young superheroes to travel ...

It's a great story but I'm just wondering if you're going to develop it. You kind of hinted that you're probably going to continue it. Anyway, review time: "What is ...

I've editted according to your reviews. Hopefully I didn't miss anything. The story itself is still a bit loose but it'll fall in. Thanks for the reviews.

Heya, I'm going to review your work. The very first thing I thought when I began to read this is: Hey look, an opportunity for me to study the emotion ...

Thank you for the reviews. Just need a bit more before I can edit and start Chap 1, I'll keep you posted. Thanks

Title: The Janitors Prologue: A plot is stirring. The darkness rising. Soon, the world will be cleansed. The lives of millions of mutants throughout the earth lie in the decisions ...

Greetings Master, I am here to review, as you requested. Two main things, pace and repetition. Yoda, the story gets interesting in a sentence but dies in the second. Maybe ...

Hello Stell, the names Hero... the NewHero. Onto the review: It's a very great story, in terms of simplicity but I think it would be good to have a bit ...

Thanks loads Dems, yes I will edit as much as I can. I really only did this part to try a different approach to my previous one. See from different ...