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Hey there, Hero here for your review. Now I'm not a real poet kind of guy so don't worry if I contradicted what made sense in your mind. Here we ...

Okay look, judging by the amount of reviews you've gotten, everyone loves your poem. So if I were you... I'd redo it, much, much better and pray for gold stars. ...

Your title is the school, I felt that near the end. You might want to put a bit more of The School in this prologue. A better title: My Life: ...

Please just post it on YWS, it hurts my eyes when it opens with Open Office, thanks.

Nice, although I'm not a poet. Hey, just trying to get you reviews you know, takes one to start a chain. Anyway, Firstly the Title makes you think "Who's doing ...

Think I should make it Parts 1 and 2?

THank you all. I shall re-do Chap 2, perhaps break it into Parts 1 and 2 then I shall begin to plot Chap 3 (And work on my review ratio ...

Have you read Percy Jackson and the Olympians? -- These are just names I'll call out, you can arrange them in middle name, first name, surname whatever (I suggest you ...

(Really need to improve this. Critique appreciated. :) ) Senators from all over the country argued with each other from across the room. “How the hell?” “They are dangerous!” “Give ...

I can understand why you'd be eager for a review. If I had written something this good I'd want it to be better! :mrgreen: Nice story though. I think one ...

I would like a review. The Janitors, Action/Adventure. Superhero Story.

My extra is: Name: 'Krystal Athena' Baxter Age: 15 Looks: Brown hair and brown eyes. Tallish. Pic: (She's going to be Max's crush. As he starts to get comfortable around ...

Very good. I don't really knwo much about poetry but shoot, I'll try anyway: Umm... maybe you should make it a rhyming poem? I don't know I just kept calling ...

Need a Hero? Need a Review? I'm Hiro... Okay let's do this: The first two lines are cool but... Wind whips at my hair furiously,Creating a witch-like pose around my ...

Need a Hero? Need a Review? I'm Hiro... Okay let's do this: The first two lines are cool but... Wind whips at my hair furiously,Creating a witch-like pose around my ...