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The People of Heaven Into the sinister alley, Under rainfall, Hail and howling wind, Tearful mother, Switchblade in the closet, Hopeless case, Tattered clothes on the clothes line, Through the ...

TheNewHero here for a quick review. Okay, first of all let me say I love Percy Jackson and by the way there's anew series coming out: The Heroes of Olympus ...

Hi there, thanks for the great piece. I really liked your style of writing. Your piece is so light-hearted... it's been a long since I've read something like this, a ...

Christian Contradiction I was so gripped by fear I fell to the hard, white tiling. The lights blurred above me and I stood up again. My mouth dried. My blood ...

This story has potential, but you're still missing it. Don't be afraid of breaking 'realism'. A few points you need to address, :arrow: Katarrina needs a shorter name :arrow: Katarrina ...

Nice, but I think maybe you should make it more personal? Thanks for all the work though.

This is epicly awesome. Thank you so much.

Much better, but I'm still unconvinced (Meh, I'm tough) I think your main problem was telling and not showing. Often you explained that you felt sorry, or were unconvinced etc. ...

Hero here to R(elay) and E(xplain) my VIEW of this. Okay, firstly let me say I really dislike historical war stories - especially those of more modern days. But whatever ...

Heya. I'm not very convinced. Now, I know this wasn't exactly a springtime poem, but if it is so yearning, then rather make it 3rd person, because yearning is usually ...

Maybe I ought to make a poem in reverse, Whisperer? Thanks everyone. Ayobaness.

Author's Note: Alright, final edit. I've taken everything into consideration. Before you judge this, just understand that a poet is 'a super-realist' and though this is very far from reality, ...

Okay, I've skimmed and read the story and unfortunately, I don't think you've given this much. If this is humorous, then let it be humorous in full. It's not very ...

Father The hearth's crackle, Its glow on the wall, The TV bellowing, “Oh! What football!” The Fall all around me Father. Father brought me this. Father loves his boy, The ...

Okay, thanks guys, editted. It was meant to be 'add'. Sorry, bad mistake. Thanks for your reviews. Five Boys and their Manager Five boys and their manager, Don't know why ...