Lollipopper

Hey, sorry Ranger...I'm a little late. First, this part isn't one to be ashamed of. Not even close. You did what was needed--get out quite a bit of information. I ...

Holy whoa, dude! This is so cool! You made such a simple job (writing) sound so deep. Deep thinking there--that's definitely something to be proud of. Good way to start ...

Hello, Ranger Hawk:) Thank you for PMing me! I'm surprised at how quickly you wrote this. Gahaha. I'm gonna sound like such a kiss up. This was very good! Brava! ...

Exactly as I suspected. Marvelous:) From my before post, this writing is very vivid and humorous. Besides that, I was expecting the story to be cliche or something, but it ...

Ahaha...RG, I loved it! Absolutely loved it! No negative criticism here--doesn't need any. Your writing puts such a strong image into the readers mind and I feel like the character's ...

Hey, Angel-Symphony, and Merry Christmas Eve!:) Okay, must I say, I did not lose interest in this once. It was a gorgeous piece of art, perfectly paced and painted. Many ...

Wow, this was cool. I have to say--it was good.The setting was great, and the overall idea latches your attention. But with good comes bad. I found quite a few ...

Ooh this is really good! It makes the reader thirst for more. But just two things I am notifying you of: First: the title of the school was a little ...

Hello, Nike! I enjoyed this piece. Very interesting. There were just a few things that caught my eye. First, was the writing. I felt like you were tripping over your ...

Hello, liviaalexandra. Hmm...this is an interesting piece. I think it is very fascinating, but I found it a little hard to understand at times, like Dragons said, format it into ...

Alright thank you guys so much! Great advice. And to Phoenix, sorry, I meant my character had dark hair and blue eyes, and Percy is described with sea-green eyes and ...

Hello, Teardrop. I think the overall idea of this is very cool. The synopsis really caught my attention! But I think what you really need to work on is description. ...

Okay if you guys could help me just a little...that would be great. I just need a little opinion. I am making a character in a short story of mine, ...

Thank you for PMing me again! I appreciate it. I am still very much enjoying this! First--I like the Cheshire cat comment. :D Second--I don't know why, but the first ...

Thanks so much for PMing me when you posted this! I appreciate it. Okay, first off...I noticed this chapter seemed to pivot from the idea of the last two. Now ...