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  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General
    Re: Prologue to an unnamed story

    Hey there. Welcome to the YWS!!!! :D This is a good prologue. I kept me hooked and I can't wait for the full story, I think it'll be great!. I ...

    Aug 1, 2005


  • Hey hey! I really liked this. I thought it was a good first chapter with a great ciffhanger at the end. One thing though: You seem to use Felicity's name ...

    Jun 26, 2005

  • Short Story » General, General
    Re: Teenage OutBursts Of Cliche Fun

    OOH! Is that the guy that you fancy? The one that was in the band at school? I bet it is! hehe Anyway, I liked his because I can relate ...

    Jun 25, 2005

  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General
    Re: Daughter of Kalmonder - Chapter 1

    Heehee Since you commented on my stroy I'll comment on yours It was a tricky problem, and he wished his good friend Cullun, the King of the Night Riders, a ...

    Jun 3, 2005

  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General
    Re: Blood Stream

    :shock: I don't know why, but I felt as though I was in a trance when I red this story. I just red on and on. Yeah! This was really ...

    May 15, 2005

  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General
    Re: One Single Hate, Chapter 1

    WOW! I liked this. I agree with Sureal, definetely got potential :D One small thing though: She took her favorite coat and matching hat and rushed out the door; suitcase ...

    May 14, 2005

  • Short Story » Fantasy, General
    Re: A Shadow's Cry

    Wow..I really enjoyed reading this story. Just a couple of mistakes though Matt thanked Mallum and took a look around downstairs. He toyed with the idea of going strait to ...

    May 13, 2005

  • Novel / Chapter » General, General
    Re: Gone (Chapter One)

    Ahhhh! Good cliffhanger! This story is really good. It's soooo sad!!! :cry: :cry: :cry: I already told you the critz on msn and I see that you fixed them :D ...

    May 8, 2005

  • Poetry » Lyrical, General
    Re: Masochism/Warmth (13+)

    OHHH! I liked this!! So emotional. A couple of things: Warmth is what is seek I didn't get this line. It didn't make sense. Is it meant to be Warmth ...

    May 5, 2005

  • Short Story » General, General
    Re: so much for my happy ending

    Good although you need aspace between a full stop and a new sentence eg:He is playing. He is happy. see the full space. hee! lulaby Isn't lullaby spelt with two ...

    May 5, 2005

  • Poetry » Other, General
    Re: Wind Whisper

    Hmm...it's ok I guess but I think it's not very original and it's a little cliche. Its You need an apostrophe between the "t" and "s" Because thats the most ...

    May 4, 2005

  • Short Story » Romantic, General
    Re: No Tears, No Pain

    OMG!!! It's soo beautiful. I feel like crying. It's so sad! :cry: It's reallly good though! Just one thing bacame Just a little typo. I thought I might point that ...

    May 4, 2005

  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General
    Re: untitled fantasy - prologue (rough)

    This a really good prologue in my opinion. It describes the plot very well. I just have to learn how to pronounce the names. Anyway, well done! ~Lollipop~ :D

    Apr 25, 2005

  • Short Story » General, General
    Re: Raising Mother

    I thought this was excellent. Very realistic!! You managed to concentrate on all the little details which gave it the finishing touch. Good twist at the end too! :D ~Lollipop~

    Apr 21, 2005

  • Poetry » Other, General
    Re: my grandad

    awww! This is soooo sad! I liked this peom especially this bit he will belong in my heart forever Keep writing! :D :D

    Apr 7, 2005


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