LolitaRose

Here are some... First Names Maci Peridot* Felica Taylor Maja Elora Lyndsey** Faye Sabrina Sabby Basil Rosalind Clay Jakob * Either said with or without the T. ** Use it. ...

Okay. First off, grammer. The user above me pointed out most of that, so I'm going to go on. Second, you need to space when characters talk. Like this: " ...

I'm not a regular poetry reader, but here's my opinion: it doesn't seem to flow. It seems kinda...chunky, I guess? Sorry if it's supposed to be that way, or some ...

There's one scene in Sweeney Todd when Antony gets beaten by the Beadle. Not because of how gory it was, but because I wasn't expecting it at the time. I ...

A picture of an elf with bright, red hair came to mind. She also had dark brown eyes, and tan skin.

Does anyone listen to her? I love her music, especially Miss Lucy had Some Leeches and Organ Grinder. I love her clothing, too. It's so pretty. I found her while ...

1. Do you get any feel for Skye's personality yet? If yes, what helped to build up her character? If not, what could I do to improve? She seems kinda ...

Gah. I'm in 7th grade, and they're still giving us 'Should schools have uniforms?' and 'Should candy be allowed in school?'. We've done the same ones for the past like, ...

Make the best of it. You know, live in a cardboard box, beg for money. All that cliche stuff. Maybe go out of the usual and foam at the mouth, ...

Thanks for the advice! ^.^ I'll definitley use it. A minor but important character in a story I'm writing has a lisp, and I needed help with it.

I like it. Although, I think this story would be better suited for a first person POV. Other than that, not bad! ^.^

I love anime, but I only really watch a few, Naruto, Death Note, and Powerpuff Girls Z. The last one's pretty dorky, huh? :D Aw, whatever. The cuteness of that ...

How do you show them in stories? I myself have a slight lisp, and I can't even describe it. Help would be nice. ^.^; I don't see them much in ...

The story's pretty good. The only problem I have is that the name is told later on, but that's a personal matter with me. It gives me more of a ...

I like it. Although, yes, your should be you're. I get a feeling that this poem is about being something you're not, and you want to be free of it. ...