Lofty

Please can you review this for me? I can't put the two chapters I have done into one novel because I am not very good with YWS, so if you ...

Chapter Two Anna “For the hundredth time, Anna, I couldn’t help it! We had to move! I wasn’t going to let you get twisted by that horrible man. You deserve ...

Hey there Icy! Lofty, here, to review your work... Okay, so basically, I agree with Ranger Hawk about the beginning. If you're going to make a reference to it later ...

Can I just say (this isn't much of a review, but hey!) that this story that you're writing is amazing! I am totally hooked onto it, and you have to ...

Amazing! I was completely hooked and i totally loved it! The end was really clever, and so was the explanation of what was actually going on. Really great stuff. After ...

Hello! Lofty here to review! (: A gray, shiny car rolled along the empty side-street in the night. It had just begun to drizzle, and through the window, a young, ...

Chapter One Jamie Grabbing my school bag off the hook, I stormed out of the front door and into the cold, damp street. I didn’t bother to shield my head ...

Hey (: I'll write my corrections and commentary in blue: Fire. That was all I saw everywhere I looked. I wasn’t sure who caused this, but surely I wasn’t planning ...

Hello Emmzziee! Your poem is very deep. I really liked how you chose to portray the girl that everyone thinks is perfect, but really, she is just like everyone else. ...

Hello there! You followed me, so I thought I would have a look at your work. I agree with you, it is short. A possible suggestion might be to make ...

Oh wow THANK YOU!! Rob you are awesome. THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR REVIEWING EVERYONE. Well, I say everyone. The two people that have reviewed my work (; Lots of ...

Hey thanks guys!! :D If any of you would like to read my first submitted piece, it's called 'Sorry, I Forgot...' Post on my profile if you ever want me ...

Wow. This was unusually thrilling for me, because usually I don't tend to read gory fantasy stories, but this was different. I was totally hooked in from the start, wanting ...

Hey thanks 'Life'!! Yeah did not mean to submit as a novel. However I was planning on maybe developing it so that the storyline follows the her through the day ...

Wow! This story was gripping. I loved the way that the narrative switched from a third-person commentary to a first person experience. It really enhanced the emotions rushing through the ...