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I'll keep this short, seeing as I don't have much to say. This is nice and philosophical and all that, but, as you said, others have said that it didn't ...

Holy crapola. The diner smells of death and brew. That is one fantastic first sentence. And now I will read on. ^^ I'm sitting here, feet propped up on the ...

Hi there! I suppose it's because I don't know what's coming next, but why do you even have a prologue? This information, for me, seems as if it could be ...

Oh dear heavens. That first paragraph jumped out at me. And I don't mean the "BOO, did I scare you?!" kind of thing. I mean that a hoard of monsters ...

Hi. :D This is actually quite nice. The beginning was a bit slow, but near the end it became really sweet. There were a few nit-picky things that bothered me, ...

Hi there! Shawn was worried. Why? He had a date. Sure he'd had dates before, but this was the one date that would seal the deal. He and his girlfriend, ...

I haven't read this book, and frankly I don't even know what it's about. (Though I suppose we can assume from your fantastic little piece of insight, eh?) This is ...

Hiya! Please please please tell me that your misspelling of "vengeance" was on purpose. Anyways, to the review! I love how you jumped straight into the action, wonderful job. However, ...

Hi there! Okay, so I read a bit into this and had to immediately pause. I had a "What the heck just happened?!" moment, and I really hate those. Here's ...

This is really great! It's concise and clear, and everyone can relate to it. Just one nit-pick: "A far" is actually one word. It should be "afar." I like this ...

Hi there! So, this story has a great beginning. The dreams and the detail in those first few paragraphs give the story a soft, soothing sort of tone, but then ...

Invisible Man by Ralph Ellison: I'm obsessed with stories with strong character. I actually read this one for English this year, and I was supposed to focus on analyzing character ...

Hi there. :) Maybe it's because I'm so tired right now, but I really had trouble focusing on the story as a whole. Its pace seems so quick, constantly jumping ...

Hi there, again. Your writing style sounds so much like mine, I'm excited to read this.

Hi there! The first thing that I noticed here is that your characters could use a bit of development. There are also other ways to improve, but I'll mainly focus ...