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Re: Russian Lullaby
This was interesting. A little confusing, but I think I got the gist of it (I might read it again, just to make sure.)
Nov 25, 2011 -
Re: For the "invent a word" contest
Interesting word... does it have anything to do with the latin form of language? the 'catat' have a meaning in latin? Just curious.
Nov 23, 2011 -
Re: Tick tick tick
I liked it... but... Why did it only rhyme for the first few lines? I liked the rhyming, and then it disappeared! Also, there should probably be quotation marks here: ...
Nov 23, 2011 -
Re: The MARRIED Couples
This sems like it has a little bit of potential, but it needs revision. It just didn't flow very well, and only kept my interest into the first paragraph. But ...
Nov 23, 2011 -
Re: The Nightmare
I stumbled forward through a tangle of vines, and took another glance around the lush forest, hoping to push a surge of renaissance. Something was too familiar about the thorn ...
Nov 23, 2011 -
Re: Heart-To-Heart
This was pretty nice. I think it could use a tad more fluency... but I'm not really a lyric-writing person, so I always have trouble finding the exact problems. I ...
Nov 23, 2011 -
Re: Labyrinth of Days
I'm not really one to judge lyrics (I'm a short-story and novel writer) but this seemed pretty good! I judged it from a poem-standard, because I know a little about ...
Nov 23, 2011 -
Re: Rain
For some reason the way this is written makes me think it was from the future... I don't know why, it just seems like a future-space-techno poem, if that makes ...
Nov 22, 2011 -
Re: Feathers of Fire
This is really neat! It makes me curious about the novel you designed it for... the title, and the image! :)
Nov 22, 2011 -
Re: Now That We Know I'm Not Here...
I thought this was supposed to be poetry of some sort... I don't get it. :P
Nov 10, 2011 -
Re: Observations Of The Stage Manager
This was pretty cute! I liked it... and it seemed to have good fluency. One thing that popped out at me though, "Not what you want to have to choose ...
Nov 10, 2011
