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Re: Prologue/ Eyes of Ice, Hair of Fire
Welcome to YWS, WriteLiveRead! I must say, this story was phenomenal!!!!!! The imagery and mystery brought your story to life, and I really really REALLY enjoyed it! Not only was ...
Jan 22, 2015 -
Re: Flying Memoir
First off, wonderful job, apuri615! I agree, the journey can be even greater than the destination! A few critiques: "That is one great part of flying, I get to catch ...
Jan 20, 2015 -
Re: Start to a book? Has potential.
Dang! This intro gave me chills! Your descriptive adjectives and verb variations were spectacular! I would suggest to capitalize Cold Kingdom because cold kingdom could mean just a plain kingdom ...
Mar 25, 2014 -
Re: Wool of the Prince-- Prologue and Chapter 1
Nice job, fortis! I can tell, this is a story I'm going to be coming back to for a while. The prologue was my favorite part, by far. The mystery ...
Mar 25, 2014 -
Re: Minecraft: Ender Rising
Hey, EmeraldLinks! First off, I must say I loved your creativity with your story. I remember being your age and making up stories like this all the time. It's great ...
Mar 23, 2014 -
Re: Just Gah.
Amazing! This poem made me feel so sad, frightened, angry, and slightly relatable all at the same time! An excellent piece of art! I'm not a professional poet, but I ...
Mar 23, 2014