Lioness

I like this chapter, it grabs my attention and I'm curious to know more. The voice works for the story and it is easy to understand. You have a mixture ...

I like this, and yes, I won't be a grammer nazi. First of all, I like the rhyming in this, you have some good word choices! Often, in rhyming poetry, ...

I really like the short story. Don't worry about people being a bit nasty about this, because it's good! The dialogue is witty and fun to read. My favourite part ...

Although this piece is short, your language is quite well chosen. The rhyming is quite good too. You are are showing how irritated you are with the bug. One slight ...