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Hey! This is really nice and interesting so far! I love the way you started it. It made me want to read more :D There we're a couple of things ...

I'm in love with the hunger games! I'm glad I found this. Anyways, It was great! But, i have a couple of tips. You said: Said a lot...For example, Haymitch ...

I love the hunger games and I'm so glad I found a fan-fiction about it! It's really great so far and I love the idea of Haymitch's games. It was ...

I really like it! It was very fun to read But then again it was kinda sad:D Very nice use of onomatopoeia!

Dear Mockingjay, I love you Jay. Before your read any of this. Make sure you know that I love you. If your reading this right now your father and I ...

Thanks Writteninstone! I mentioned that she has jet black hair in there. But, yeah I know what you saying. I'll keep your suggestions in mind! Thanks again!

I love glee! I'm so glad you made a fan-fiction about it. A few tips though, you said that Quinn whipped her hair at Rachel multiple times. Maybe you could ...

Thanks for the reply Narniafreak! Yeah it's a bit confusing in the beginning and nothing really happens but, as the story goes on everything starts to make sense because I ...

This is very good but, you should try to tell more of a story. I love the message you wrote about and it's very true and original. Also, I found ...

I know the chapters are a bit short! Sorry and enjoy! Prologue: My name is Katniss Mellark. I am the mockingjay. The symbol of rebellion. The reason there is peace ...

Truly, Great! Again, it's very detailed and very interesting. I caught one thing though. It was realer than ever I'm not sure realer is a word...But you could try saying ...

This is so amazing! And very true. I love poems that tell a story. The rhymes we're great and made it more interesting but, there we're a couple of words ...

This is really good! Very interesting. I have a few suggestions though. At the end of the chapter you kind of just cut off. You should try maybe adding some ...

Prologue: Violet Emerson: the Smart Girl, the Nice Girl, the Teachers Pet, the Nerd. I would give anything to have these nicknames again. But now, I’ve earned myself a nickname ...

This is really interesting and you put a lot of detail in it! Keep up the good work! I did notice something though, Of course I elected to stay with ...