Lilicia

Hi Cottonrulz! Lilicia here, with my promised review. :smt003 Wow. So, I read your poem, and I'm amazed that you're new to writing poetry. This is so powerful, and the ...

Finally, I've managed to post chapter four! It's a long one, so I split it up in a few parts. Reviews and critiques are very much appreciated! Thanks. :mrgreen: “Let ...

Hi! Lilicia again. :smt001 Wow, this is getting really exciting! This chapter really dragged me into the story.I love the way the plot's going! "It's a kind of sleep. Somewhere ...

Hi! This is very interesting. I loved the way you described everything. At first it was a little unclear, but then I realised what it was about. :wink: A few ...

Hi! First of all, I really like the MC's tone. It's really realistic, and makes the reader want to read on. :D I loved it how you completely changed Cinderella ...

Hi! It's me again :D This is a really good chapter, and I love the way you described Lola. It was very intruiging. “I’m sorry, professor. I was just about ...

Wow, yet another emotional chapter. It's a great follow on, keeping the reader intruiged all throughout. However, it could be improved: Link was usually quiet anyway s , even before ...

Hi! Wow. This is amazing, I could picture everything so well. It's so emotional... "What do you mean they're dead?" I demanded at the police officer. I agree with Sasha. ...

Hi! This is great, in a very gory sort of way. It captured my attention from the start! A few nitpicks: She stood standing there 'Stood' and 'standing' are the ...

Hi! Lilicia here :D So... I love this! You've got the tone of curiosity and mystery just right, making the reader constantly impatient to read more. Just a few things: ...

Hi! Lilica here ^^ I just did a very detailed review for this, but unfortunately I pressed something and everything vanished... :shock: I'll just go over the main points: So, ...

Hi! Ohh this is creepy! But good, and very interesting :lol: However, there are always nitpicks! It was on a dull and dark windy winters afternoon when I made the ...

Hi! Sorry once again for the huge delay in reviewing this! I've finally found some time to do it, though. :) This is really good - it kept my attention ...

Hi! I really like this - it's nicely written and does have a nice rythm. There's just a few nit-picks: His knobby knees Knobbly knees is better :) His belly ...

Chapter three is ready! Well... not quite - I could do with critiques! Thanks! :D We looked eachother in the eyes for endless seconds, as if the woman were trying ...