Lilicia

Hi! Woah that was kind of creepy :shock: It was good, and I was definitly surprised at the outcome *shudders* Onto the nitpicks: David watched the girl passing alongside his ...

Hi! This is interesting and kept my attention to the very end, so good job. A few nitpicks: “COME IN,” Try to avoid capitals: it is distracting and not very ...

Hi! This is a great story - it's gripping from the start, and I love the idea. Just a few nitpicks: All of it was too awful to for my ...

Hi! So this a good story in terms of consistancy in your writing, and it is written in such a way that it is easy to read, so good job ...

Hi! This is interesting - you captured Dai's emotions just right. However, there are a few nitpicks: He slowly registered a high pitch whine coming from his left, he glanced ...

Hi! This is good - I really loved the descriptions. Good job! It kind of like a story that a woman is reading and I am not sure how to ...

Hi! Can you do mine please? :) Format: Novel Name of Book: The Decider Author name AKA Your name: A.D Short synoposis: After an explosion in her school, Alexandra Rouge ...

This is something I randomly wrote the other evening. Reviews would be appreciated :) She looked out of her window, observing the way the plane flew across the sky so ...

Hi! I haven't written a review in ages, so forgive me if this isn't great... Anyway, here goes! So I really liked the beginning, the questions and short answers are ...

Hey! Glad I could help, and yes - Nancy does seem much more realistic now. :) I think the ending's great. ~Lilicia

Hello! Thank you for the second review, very encouraging! :) Ok, so here goes: Seeing as Lumierre already pointed out the nitpicks, I won't bother with those. This is a ...

Hi! This is a very interesting and original story. I like it, especially the MC's chatty tone. :mrgreen: Just a few nitpicks... I don’t know whether I’ve been to Florida, ...

This is the beginning of a story I'm working on... Sorry I tried to put certain bits of this in italics by my computer doesn't seem to like that. Anyway, ...

Here's something I wrote while bored one evening... Comments would be appreciated! :D Life flows around me; a collection of colours, voices and nature. The sun melts lazily on the ...

Hi Pretty Crazy! Lilicia here with your promised review. :D This is a very interesting and original story. I like the fact that you chose dragons - hardly anyone writes ...