Lilicia

Hey there! This is definitly a very much improved version of the first draft; at times the emotions and descriptions were so vivid that I felt like I was in ...

Hey there! I like this. It's intruiging, and certainly something that not many people write about. I love it how you make Light and Dark people, it's a perspective that ...

Hey there! This is very original and you did a good job on catching my attention. However, it is slighty too action-packed, making it confusing. I advise putting a lot ...

Hi there! ... wow that's really good. I really wasn't expecting him to kill everyone at the end. I love the message you convey through this, it's a powerful story. ...

Hey there! Welcome to YWS! I'm Lilicia *shakes hand* Corrections are in red , suggestions in bold . :) That morning , I woke up late and rushed to school ...

Hello there! This is a very interesting idea, and I wasn't expecting the end at all! It gave me a shock :shock: However, I think that this does need a ...

Hi there! So this is a very good piece. I think that how you described the whole out-of-control-horse thing was excellent. (even though I've never actually been on a horse, ...

Hello there! Welcome to YWS! I hope you learn to love it as much as I do :D I'm Lilicia *shakes hand* Okay, so on to the review! First off, ...

Hi there! Aww this is sweet. I like it. Corrections in red and suggestions in bold : "Where's he at?" asks my sister, Misty, as we wait at the airport ...

Hi there! This is great, the emotions are so clear, and it's beautifully written. How you described the crash was excellent. My only criticism would be about Morgan and Stephen. ...

Hi! This is an interesting concept, and a good idea for a story. Just a few nitpicks: slut, bitch and hore *whore Maybe he ment just for that day *meant ...

This is for LavenderBlue's Best Prologue Contest. Enjoy :) It began with a bin and a cigarette. The rest kind of just unravelled on its own accord. It definitely wasn’t ...

Thanks for the feedback! I see what you mean about the descriptions, Snoink - I'll fix that soon :)

The time is one fifteen, and there is a man standing on the rim of Milleu Bridge, waiting for the courage to jump. If you looked any closer, you would ...

Hi! I liked this, it's a very gripping story. Corrections in red, suggestions in bold :) I felt a cold chill rush up my spine as the darkness touched my ...