Lilicia

I had to stay in hospital for another two weeks. Practically my whole school came to visit me, each one bringing yet another pointless ‘Get Well Soon’ card that I ...

This was sweet :D A few nit-picks: “I just don’t want you to go yet,” I spoke walking towards him. I don't think spoke is the best word here, it ...

I like it! 20 kids? Is that possible???!!! The ending's sad - but then again it makes a storyline, so I hope you carry on writing this story! I liked ...

This was amazing! Very descriptive and well written. Just a few things: So after talking it over with his mother and my son the Tuesday following my husband’s death, I ...

I wrote this for a competition a few years ago and just found it again now - please tell me what you think! :D My Family history is nothing exciting; ...

This is so touching. It made me really sad, and sent shivers up my spine - it really did. It's written really nicely - it's so easy to understand yet ...

I wrote a story and want to know if it's any good! This is just the first chapter - there's 11 in total. Sorry this is a bit long!!! Please ...

This is good but there's one thing that doesn't work: after saying she loves most people it doesn't work that she should be meloncholy - maybe you should explain why ...

Thanks everyone! This really helped :D I've made the next installment (Missing chapter 2) and it needs some serious editing! Please help!!!! :)

You won't understand this if you haven't read the first part. Please review!!! :D Slowly, the darkness that had numbed my senses with its cradling softness began to lift. Voices ...

Hi! This is a sweet story-line but I think that there's a big lack of emotion and character development. I didn't feel very close to the main characters - you ...

The wind whipped at my hair like an angry beast, whispering dark secrets into my ears. The street was empty; the sky overcast. The papers that had rattled free from ...

This was amazing! Your characters seemed so real, I could just picture them through Sonora's eyes. Your descriptions are beautiful. I hope you're going to continue with this story! I ...

This is good! It's interesting and original. I think all your errors have been pointed out - my only advice is not to be so repetitive in the first paragraph ...