Lilicia

This is for SporkPunk's Titles contest. Thank you for reading! I walk along the canal, my bare feet creating the unique sound of flesh against earth. The strip of grass ...

Hello there! I liked this - it's very captivating, and I would definitly like to read more. Just a few things: I remember the day as though it was yesterday ...

Hey there! So I like this story, it carries a nice message. I'll deal with the nitpicks first: How could anything matter to him now? Yeah , people always complain ...

Hello there! Thought I might return the review :) So I really enjoyed this. It's got a nice flow to it, and the characters are very realistic. It didn't seem ...

This is for Octave's The Tornadoes Are For You contest. Thanks for reading! *** Kevin Pots. Thirteen years old. Thick, brown hair and frighteningly light eyes. A little jaw, clenched. ...

Hi there! I really liked this, it's quite a common topic but you pulled it off very well. I loved the way you put Sally's thoughts it italics, it really ...

Hi there! First off, I really liked the dialogue. It was very realistic. Just a few things: Jan came over white as if she had seen a ghost. She pushed ...

Hi there! Well, this is certainly different! But in a good way, it leaves me curious as to what will happen next. She was only fourteen, you see. That's why ...

Hi there! I really liked this - though you're right, it is quite depressing! But good job on the emotions, I really felt for the MC. A few things: Back ...

Hi there! Ahh this is so sad :( I really enjoyed it: you got the emotions just right, and the descriptions were amazing. Just a few nitpicks: Now, sitting in ...

Hi there! I'll start off with the nitpicks. Corrections in red, comments in bold :] Chapter One: Crossing my arms over my stomach, I approached Jordan. He was laughing at ...

Hi there! This is a very interesting idea, it makes me want to read more. I like the whole idea of the sacrifice. Just a few things: She never sat ...

This is for Yuriiko's Postsecrets contest :D Jenny , I’m not a regular. I come every week or so, each time hoping to catch a glimpse of that smile you ...

Hey there! So I like this, it's an interesting start. It's quite short, but I'll do my best with a proper review. :] He trudged through the snow, slowed by ...

Hi there! So, this is an interesting beginning. I like it. However, it's very vague. I advise you add some more detail, otherwise you might lose the reader. Cold. Everything ...