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  • Lyric Poetry Re: Tender Mourning

    The grass leaks With emerald-green light Which I savour tenderly In my melting brown eyes The sun cries For all its lost, For all its mourned, In its crooked light ...

    Jul 21, 2009
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Bonnets, Bows

    Hi Demi! This poem's beautiful - it's stuffed full of beautiful imagery and the title is very intriguing. Bonnets, bows day at seaside wind blows sand into eyes and you ...

    Jul 21, 2009
  • Fanfiction Short Stories Re: Almost Lovers

    Hi! Ali here! This was a very interesting and well-written piece. I loved it! :D Now for the nit-picks: As she looked up to see who I meant - though ...

    Jul 21, 2009
  • Fanfiction Short Stories Re: Twiligt Spoof

    Hi! I really liked this - it was funny, and well-written. I loved it how you twisted the story-line completely, yet managed to keep some of the original story as ...

    Jul 21, 2009
  • Narrative Poetry Re: The Boy Who Cried Wolf

    Hello there! Let me start off by saying that this is a truly amazing piece - it's so beautifully written, and it's very intriguing. I'm not very good at reviewing ...

    Jul 21, 2009
  • Novel Workshop Re: Pure White Lies

    Set modern times, a girl begins to mysteriously fade into another world - one where she'll find all that she's ever looked for, but also the biggest dangers she's ever ...

    Jul 18, 2009
  • Action/Adventure Short Stories Re: Lies

    I really liked this - it seemed very realistic and the emotions were portrayed just right. Just a few things: I thought, secretly she was the reason why I had ...

    Jul 18, 2009
  • Historical Fiction Short Stories Re: The incredible journey

    I agree with Hero - it's a great idea for a story, very interesting and intriguing. In some parts it's not very clear - when, where, why?... but apart from ...

    Jul 18, 2009
  • General Fiction Novels Re: Facing Endless Sorrow - chapter 1

    This is actually really good! It's easy to read and makes me curious as to what happens next. What kind of parents would put their child up for adoption like ...

    Jul 18, 2009
  • General Fiction Novels Re: The Sense of Danger. Part 1

    Hello there! This is very short, so I can't do a proper review - but I can point out the mistakes: At this quiet day you hardly hear anything. This ...

    Jul 17, 2009
  • Action/Adventure Novels Re: Missing - chapter 4

    I've already changed the last chapters according to the reviews, and just to make it clear the main character doesn't know more than the reader. Anyway, please help me make ...

    Jul 17, 2009
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: The Faceless

    This is AMAZING. It's so well written and I only found one typo: Though thje Faceless followed him every step of the way, It gave me the shivers. I could ...

    Jul 16, 2009
  • Action/Adventure Short Stories Re: Molly

    Hello! This is a good start but I suggest you read over it. For now, it's very hard to read - the sentences are long and missing commas. This makes ...

    Jul 16, 2009
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: Violent father and mother

    This is too short to be properly reviewed, but I can point out the errors. I'll put my corrections in bold and my suggestions/comments in brackets. "What do you think ...

    Jul 13, 2009
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: Inglorious Innocence

    Wow - this was interesting! Just a few things: Suddenly her party had arrived, Take out the 'had' - that makes the sentence go too far back. Also, there should ...

    Jul 11, 2009


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