Lilac_Wood

Lilac's absolutely fine :)

I can see you're paying attention to the advice you were given in the first two parts :) It just keeps getting better and better, so, yes, definitely keep writing! ...

Looking good, all in all :) Poking at some grammar... This is something I used to do a lot. I still have to watch for it in my own writing. ...

I post this more as a little more background on the story blurb "Passcode" than anything else. Questions, comments, suggestions welcome! (So is prodding.) “I don’t get it,” Michelangelo said ...

The backstory isn't the clearest in the beginning, is it? I should either tune it up or set it up to be explained later... Her parents first were caught and ...

Thanks again all for comments and suggestions. Believe me when I say they're taken to heart :) As a sort of answer to the "Passcode" title comment, this was written ...

I really liked this :) Just a few suggestions: In the beginning, you have a lot of "was" sentences. Using the same structure in sentence after sentence can sort of ...

Gods are fun. I love mythology :) Thanks for the reply!

Ah, I love Redwall books! One of my favorite series, and one of my favorite authors. I also love "Castaways of the Flying Dutchman" and the sequel... *dances around* Very ...

I wrote this for a writing group I'm a part of, and I like it enough that I think I'm going to keep going with it. If it doesnt fit ...

This draws me in more than the first part did. It's got me asking questions. Why are these brothers fighting? Who will win, and what will happen because of it? ...

You're right, it is very short. One question: By tavern, did you mean cavern? I suppose a tavern could have sacred tombs, but a cavern would be the more likely ...

'Ello! Name's Caitlyn Wells, or Fenix, if ye like :wink: I'm nearly twenty, attending college with the intent to major in English and Vocal Performance. I absolutely love to write, ...