Young Writers Society

You could always try to rhyme meanings and say that you like that Hebrew way of doing it! 'Course I tried that once and made my teacher really mad...*shiver*. Yeah...don't ...

I really loved this poem! It's definitely one of my favorites of all time. I think that you could use just a bit more solidity in your train of thought, ...

Sorry about the mix up! This is the actual poem; the other one was a work-in-progress for a different forum. Thanks for the feedback, though, now I'll know what to ...

A man of little consequence stumbled on a town one day, and in that town, he saw a fence blocking people from the way. This man was puzzled by this ...

I must say that this is the most entertaining thing I've read all week! XD No disabled access...that one's a keeper! I also like the reference to the "suspect" plants ...

This seems okay, but I would suggest letting the words speak for themselves, not the capitals. The last line is a bit awkward as well; you kind alost the flow ...

Over fields and hills he wanders, eyes and thoughts and minds he ponders, dreaming hard and dreaming long, stopping just to hear a song. The sound, so full it makes ...

I really love the idea that you put into this! Like everyone else, it is feeling a little list-like. And then the rhyme...I got a bit confused, as it looked ...

This was chaotic, but I liked what you did with it! I think that I might like the first two stanzas best, though, if you asked me. ^.^; Just a ...

This was a wonderful poem. I can practically feel the same park tugging at the edges of my memory. There's also a decidedly lonely mood to the last line, and, ...

This was an...interesting poem. You dropped the rhyme, switched your meter, and your imagery, though wonderfully descriptive, figurative, and wonderful in every way, shape, and form, was chaotic. Ever

Nice! I agree with Nightshade in that Acrostics are cool, and yours shows potential, yet right now in it's unedited form it's rather bland. You used "So bradford wrote" twice, ...

Okay, first thing is to stop stressing. It shows in the rhyme, meter, and even the tone of your poem/lyric thingy. You have a valid, original idea, if not a ...

It was pretty good for a ramble, yet very long, as you said. The thing that I'm a mite confused on is who's the narrator? Is it oldar, younger, middle ...

First off, I really like the myth that you created. It was true to the original mold that the Greek myths were all based on (not an easy thing to ...