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Re: Prologue
Thank you for the review. I've fixed the dialogue. Regarding the matter of chapters; this isn't the beginning of the story. The main character has not be introduced. I thought ...
Jul 7, 2014 -
Re: Prologue
Thanks for the advice. The dialogue was something I intended to fix in a later draft, but I wasn't sure what the rule was. Its fixed now, but somehow in ...
Jul 7, 2014 -
Re: Prologue
Thanks for the review. I appreciate the advice. I do feel like the last paragraph needs somework. The mystery of the fire was intended, but I'll talk about that later ...
Jun 12, 2014 -
Re: A Foreign King <title pending>, Part One *edited*
Great writing! I was really impressed with how smooth each sentence read. Your plot is very compelling and I'd love to read more. Keep it up!
Jun 12, 2014