Lexi

Oh, and (forfot to say,) does anyone else hate Justin Beiber and love Doctor Who and/or Robin Hood Jonas Armstrong is

Hi!!! I'm new, just felt like saying that. BTW i'm accident prone (so check out my club *hint, hint*)

Soz, if anybody's interested AT ALL, the blog address is actually it's nothing fancy, just MORE of my poems. (yes, yes, i know. Now settle down)

I think this one kind of looses its touch after the sixth or seventh stanzas so if you have any tips then PLEASE help!! BTW you can check out my ...

This is a seriously good poem. But i could make a few adjustments... "A flourishing art, are but the remains of labour unkind" This line sort of ruins the flow ...

Oh, and Jash, what do you mean about the title?

Yeah, well, i was in a very wierd mood (well, what do you expect when some maths teacher is trying to teach you statistics)

that is awsome! how on earth do you manage to write for that long without it turning to drivel? Yours truly "that person who can't write poems that are more ...

Wow! that is so "out of the heart". I feel your pain coz there's a guy in my drama school who i feel the same way about but can't talk ...

that is one good peice of imagary, i like the bit when you went into the paragraph (you probably meant this but...) it gives the feeling of motion and action, ...

Really well written at the start but you kind of lost me in the middle, it's sort of...well...random. Great title though, really attention grabbing.

Love the imagery and the rythym is really clear, you should develop this. With those one or two verses to start with you could work with it and make it ...

That is so good! You are going to be writing more of them aren't you? One little tip could be to explain who Falon is a little more, i got ...

i love how you wrote the fire imagery, you kept the rythym really well but the first two or three paragraphes went off the point a bit. Still, all in ...

So true, i have a friend who is a hardcore Wicca believer and she always has to explain what Wicca is, it probably makes it harder coz she goes to ...